I was lying on the forest floor one afternoon, resting in the shade to
hide from the heat of the day. As I lay here, napping, I can hear
everything. I can hear the birds making their nests in the trees above
me. I can hear tiny critters scurrying
across the leaves of the forest floor and under the bushes. Just as I begin to doze off, I feel a light
tickling on the top of my nose. My
instincts take over and I reach my paw out to capture whatever it is that has
awakened me from my slumber. As I lift
my paw, I see a tiny little grey mouse.
Now, surely a mouse would know better than to run across the nose of a
lion, sleeping or not. So I ask the
mouse, “have you lost your mind? You
surely have made your final, and fatal, mistake my friend.” To which this tiny creature replied, “Please,
Mr. Lion. I’m so sorry for waking
you! I was startled by something in the
forest and was trying to escape. I did
not realize you were here until it was too late. It appears I escaped one dangerous situation only
to land in another.” As he speaks, I
feel a small twinge of pity for this tiny and quite unlucky creature. But, how can I ignore a snack that wonders so
willingly within my grasp? The mouse
continues, “Please, Mr. Lion, spare me!
If you spare my life I promise to repay you some way, some how, some
day!” I found this quite amusing, not
that she begged for her life, but the fact that she believed something as small
could help a lion. However, I felt the
need to release her, besides such a small mouse would provide me with no real
hunger satiation. I released her and she
scurried off across the forest floor.
Many days later I found myself in quite the predicament. I had been stalking a deer. I crouched behind some tall grass and began
to ease slowly forward toward my meal.
Just as I took my second step, I heard a loud click. I turned just in time
to see the large net engulf me completely.
I looked around frantically expecting to see some human coming at me
with a spear to kill me, but saw nothing.
I began to attempt to free myself from the ropes, but to no avail. They were so tight and held strongly to the
ground. There was nothing I could do. I was trapped. In my fear and anger, I began to roar
loudly. The animals scurried away, the
birds left the trees, and I was utterly alone.
Just then, I heard the small scurry of a tiny creature on the forest
floor, and it appeared to be getting louder.
Was it coming closer to me? Just
then, I saw her. It was the mouse I had
released only days earlier. She ran over
to me and just looked at me. Finally,
she spoke. “I told you I would repay you
one day and you just laughed at me. Now
you see that even a small mouse can help the powerful lion.” She gnawed at the ropes and I was freed. The mouse then scurried off into the
forest. I stood up and stretched my body
and pondered the fact that, had I killed that tiny mouse days ago there’s no
telling what could have happened to me! I
thought quite differently about my place in this forest from then on.
Aesop's "The Lion and the Mouse" |
This is Aesop's The Lion and the Mouse. The mouse runs across the lion's nose while he's napping. The lion catches him and prepares to eat the mouse. The mouse then begs the lion to release him, promising to repay the kindness one day. Aesop's moral to this story is that "kindness is never wasted."
Bibliography:
The Lion and the Mouse (bronze statue by Tom Otterness) (Beelden aan Zee museum, Scheveningen). Web Source: http://tinyurl.com/nxrbqmt
The Lion and the Mouse by Aesop (2006). Web Source: http://tinyurl.com/qfq6bbb
Bibliography:
The Lion and the Mouse (bronze statue by Tom Otterness) (Beelden aan Zee museum, Scheveningen). Web Source: http://tinyurl.com/nxrbqmt
The Lion and the Mouse by Aesop (2006). Web Source: http://tinyurl.com/qfq6bbb
I so totally remember this tale! I heard it all the time growing up, but always from the mouse's perspective. This was a really neat twist on that. You did a wonderful job expanding on the arrogance of the lion by having him spare the mouse solely for his own amusement (rather common trait of the arrogant character archetype). And the ending was marvelous! How you changed the moral of the story from one about acts of kindness being repaid (which only about a thousand fairy tales have as a theme) and instead made it about rethinking your place in the world and realizing that we are all on a more common field than we may realize. By taking such a common story but switching it with that unexpected line of the lion's self-reflection at the end really brought out the shock value of the statement and was a very effective tool.
ReplyDeleteI've just got one tip for the writing - even in a tale like this, starting a new paragraph every time a different character speaks makes it easier to tell who is talking, and helps the story flow better. Other than that, everything was perfect! Thanks for the entertaining read :)
I love this tale, and unlike Elizabeth, I had not heard it before. I think the tale has such a powerful message and I am glad you decided to retell it for this week's storytelling assignment. I like that you included Aesop's message that "kindness is never wasted" in the Author's Note. I think you did a great job in expanding the story and keeping this central message strong. When I began reading I actually could envision the scene in the jungle. I pictured the lion lying in the brush with a small tiny mouse scurrying across his belly. Your imagery you created was above and beyond. I also thought it was great how you expanded that the lion was not just happy because his life had been saved, but that he took this experience as a lesson. You imply that he begins to question the hierarchy and how just because he is the King of the jungle does not mean the smaller creatures below him are worthless. I agree with Elizabeth that when having dialogue it is best to make them different paragraphs. But it was a great retelling! Keep up the good work
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your story, I knew that it seemed familiar. I read it before when I was much younger and even after all these years, it is still a good story! I love the moral of the original story and I like your adaption to it. Like Elizabeth said, I like how you added personality to the characters. It added depth to the original storyline and made the story much more lively.
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