Hi Michele! So. Your Storybook Introduction is awesome. Just thought I'd start with that! It was really cool how you had the wolf pack narrate directly to the reader. I actually imagined myself sitting up warily from the ground to see a camp fire roaring and a pack of wolves all standing around me. I also loved how you had the wolf leader comfort us; you had him know that we would be uncomfortable talking to a wolf. You also explained that the reason they could speak was because the Cherokee spirit flows through them, I loved having the reasoning for why they were capable of talking with me. The wolves are so caring! The main one keeps pushing food and water, knowing that the traveler is exhausted and needs to recuperate, so cool. The hospitality that you have the wolves show makes me wonder if the Cherokee nature is of wonderful generosity and hospitality. Did you learn about that as you were researching and include it in your introduction? If so, you did a wonderful job at incorporating the nature of the Cherokee without blatantly stating it, you worked it into the story from the wolf! I really look forward to reading the stories you have the wolves tell! Keep up the great work!
Hi Michele! First off I love the style of writing you chose for your introduction. Not going to lie reading the first line kind of confused me. I was thinking oh maybe it’s a man? Maybe a spirit? Then I realized oh how fun it’s a talking wolf. The wolf seems very aware that the fact that they can talk could be surprising to someone. I find it humorous that they’re almost treating him as a child. Its endearing how they right off the bat take care of him, giving him a place to rest, food to eat, and pine tea to drink. Not sure what pine tea is but I wouldn’t mind having some while conversing with a talking wolf. I love how you hinted that not only will the wolf be telling tales of the old world but also other creatures too. I’m looking forward to what creatures you’ll use, what they’re going to say, and how the mysterious “ Unega Asgaya” will react to all of this. It’s cool to imagine that this person could be the key to helping form a new better world. Great introduction Michele, I’ll be sure to return and read the remaining story!
So first this first. I really enjoyed reading your introduction. Like other commenters, I think it is super awesome for the stories to be told from an animal perspective especially a wolf pack! I also really like the idea of the use of "campfire storytelling" method to get your main points across. I really would like to curl up next to a fireplace and read these stories! I also really love that you have given this wolf pack as sense of culture. Culture is one of those things that really excite me and I really appreciate your use of it in these stories! Oh and btw, that picture of the wolf pack... perfection!
Today, I read your first storybook story Tricky, Tricky Turtle. I loved reading this story because it had a good mixture of cute innocents at first and then moral dilemma and a dash of death to counterbalance the cuteness :) . In the beginning of the story I think it was a very nice touch, when you carried over from your introduction to make the read feel comfortable while reading the story! I have to say that overall, the stories moral was pretty clever because I really did not expect the turtle to do what he did to the wolf *non-spoiler*. In your authors note I could really get a sense of the changes you made to the story and I do like them. Also, cute squirrel and turtle picture! I also really like your discussion of the "young weary traveler" I would definitely keep that theme throughout your storybook project!
Hi Michele, I enjoyed the lay out and the cover page of your storybook very much! The purple color and the font is so pretty. The photos on the cover page made me feel like I was about to join the campfire right a long with the travelers in the story. I love Native American stories so I was very drawn to your storybook. Your introduction was very welcoming and made me anxious to read the first story. I think it is important that you not only were making the travelers welcomed to camp but you were also making the reader welcomed to your storybook! That was a unique twist that I have not experienced yet, so nice job. I loved the title of your first story, Tricky Tricky Turtle. I could not wait to see how a turtle was going to play tricks on an animal or person. The story was very clever and the turtle really did trick the wolves! It seems like a reoccurring theme in a lot of the folktales, that the “underdog” in the story always seems to out smart the other person. Great job in telling this story. I also really loved the photo of the squirrel and turtle at the end. How cute!
Hello Michele! I just wanted to thank you for leaving such awesome feedback on my storybook. Both of you comments were very helpful and made me happy that you enjoyed my story! Thank you once again, I really appreciate it.
Hey Michele! I know that you have only left a few comments on my blog posts, but the ones that you have left have all been very well written and motivating! Thank you so much for taking the time to actually read and digest my posts! The assignments for this course can be a little repetitive, so getting a little praise every here and there certainly helps! To sum it all up - thank you!
I am here to say thank you for leaving your comment on my post! I found your comment to now only be helpful, but also very sweet. Thank you for your awesome feedback, I really appreciate it!
Hi Michele! Thank you for your awesome feedback! I was going back through comments that were on my posts and your name came up a couple of times. Each of your comments was detailed and it felt like you had really paid attention while reading my writings. This was very encouraging to me because I feel like I am able to reach the audience when I get feedback like that!
Hi Michele, I just wanted to say thank you for your feedback on my first Storytelling for this semester. I appreciate that you liked the fact that I added my hometown to my story!
Thanks for the comment, Michele! That’s so nice of you to compliment the art! I did happen to draw it, ha ha. Also, I’m really glad you liked the intro! I thought the switch in perspective would ease the reader into the first story and also give insight into Sindbad’s thoughts. As for the first story, that’s great you enjoyed it! I’m glad it made you curious enough to want to know what happens next.
Michele, I really just wanted to take some time to say that you for your lovely comment on my Storybook! I'm glad you liked the child perspective of my story and I was glad to hear that my addition of the father in the story had its desired effect. I wanted to create a listener for the story and you absolutely got that. Thank you again, and I hope you have a restful weekend!
Your storybook is wonderful! I really like your cover page, I think the font of the title and the words throughout your stories work wonderfully with the theme! I also like the collage of pictures on the cover page, especially after reading the introduction because all the pictures work perfectly with the storyline. I absolutely love your introduction! What I found most unique about it was how you defined the characteristics of the reader! For the story to tell me that I'm an exhausted, hungry, lost traveller in the woods clearly sets the stage for some great campfire stories. It's like you gave the reader a reason to stay! I also liked how you set up the personality of the wolf pack too. Overall, I just found your introduction fascinating and enjoyable to read! Your first story was great! I liked how you carried over the intro into your story, it made for a really smooth transition. The story itself was also a joy to read! I liked how you explained the purpose of the story, and I would have to say that using a squirrel instead of a possum was the perfect choice! The way you write is really wonderful and I look forward to reading more of your storybook!
Hi again, Michele! I've just read your storybook and I have to say how glad I am we were placed in the same commenting group again. Your storybook immediately drew me in with its warm, welcoming introduction. I really like how you've set up the narrative in such a way that I as a reader feel as though I am part of the story - so that I'm not just reading these stories on a computer screen, but sitting there amongst the friendly wolves being treated like a family member. I don't usually say much about author's notes, but I really like how you explained that you are using the animals to mirror human nature. I often have difficulty gleaning that type of information from readings, so I was glad that you explained it as I feel that it helped me to look more deeply into both stories. I also love the central theme of all of us - man and beast - being linked together and able to help one another out, it we would only take the time. Specifically in your second story, I liked how Adahi was inherently perplexed by the sheer altruism of Suli because he is a man. How true it is that we have trouble believing that someone would do something for apparently nothing in return, but Suli proved that true altruism does exist. I love that message. I really enjoyed your storybook, Michele, and look forward to reading more from you in the (very near) future!
Michelle, I picked your storybook as my free choice this week because I was interested in how you developed the the Cherokee tales. I loved your introduction and how you have a talking wolf as the voice for the stories. The wolf sets the scene perfectly for the cherokee tales to follow. Wolves are a great represntation of Native American culture and I like how you mention the white man will see how it once was between the wolves and humans. Your sentence "Just as love, understanding, acceptance, and cooperation can ripple their twins across the years, so can hatred, distrust, and anger" is so well written and provides such a great message.
The story of Tricky, Tricky Turtle starts off great with the wolf introducing the story. You keep the storytelling voice of the wolves standard across the stories which helps to connect your storybook. I also like how you introduced the actual story of Dagasi and Saloli with the background of how it was a time when all the animals worked together. The story was kept simple and easy to follow. The ending was perfect too. I loved how you ended the story back with the wolf's voice saying "So you see, young traveler, none of us are faultless." It ties in having the wolf be the voice and also explains the message the wolf wants the traveler to take from the story. Great job in connecting all of your stories seamlessly.
Michele, I really like the picture you have on the welcome page of your storybook. It’s often hard to capture all the elements you would like into one picture on the internet, so it is a smart idea to combine three of them. The image just makes the viewer think that the Cherokee are telling a story about two wolves while sitting around a campfire, which fits perfectly into the theme of your storybook. As I started reading your introduction, though, I realized that it was the wolves who are telling the story. This was a nice surprise. I only noticed one grammatical mistake in your introduction and that was in the second paragraph. The line reads, “The magic of the Cherokee is flows through our bodies.” The tense of this clause does not make sense, and should be changed to present tense or present perfect, i.e. take out “is” or change “flows” to “flowing.” Also, I am not familiar with the Cherokee language, but will “Unega Asgaya”, which your introduction says means White Man, apply to all readers? I really enjoyed the story of the Tricky, Tricky Turtle. I thought you tied in the moral very nicely. I was a really entertaining and fascinating story.
I really like your storybook idea! I haven't read any Cherokee stories so this was very cool. First off, I really like the images you used on your homepage. They tied everything together and really set the mood. It can be difficult to capture the mood with images sometimes so I think using all three elements was a good choice. At first, I thought the Cherokees would be telling the stories but I like that you have the wolves tell the stories. Your introduction was really well written! You used a lot of detail and the tone was great because it was easy to imagine a wolf talking to me at campfire. I definitely wanted to keep reading to find out more. You do a really good job of staying in character and maintaining its tone. I also like the image you used in the introduction. I think it helps set the mood and puts the reader in the mindset that wolves are telling the stories and not the Cherokees. The "Tricky, Tricky, Turtle!" was told really well! You are really good at writing. I noticed that you changed a few things, but I think they worked well for the story.
Your story caught my attention solely by the title. I have taken many classes on Native American’s and I was curious to see your perspective. Let me just start by saying excellent job! I really feel as though you brought to life the traditional view of Indians, how they are one with nature and kind to others. In your introduction, I love the way you keep away from a dialogue so that you can just jump right into the stories. Your introduction actually makes me think of those old black and white movies where someone speaks to the camera, which is something I really enjoyed about your story. It was actually somewhat of a comfort that the narrator was concerned about me as the reader and wanted me to be at ease. The clarification of what each story was going to be about before you even started the story was definitely something I particularly liked. You get to know just a little bit about it, but it leaves you wanting more. I really like how you continue the theme of hospitality throughout each story. The storyteller always makes sure that the travelers needs come first and that he understands each story. Each time this occurs, you can hear how excited the narrator is to have a companion. Great Job. Keep up the good work!
I love your picture collage. Most people I have seen have only used one picture so this is refreshing and sets the tone for your storybook quite nicely. Also, I love the font and color scheme you have chosen. Comparing it to your blog, I am gonna take a wild guess and say that purple is your favorite color.
I really like how you are having the wolves tell the stories. What made you decide on the wolves? Your introduction is great. It really makes me want to relax by the fire and hear what these wolves have to say.
I like your title "Tricky Tricky Turtle." I love the idea of all the animals helping each other out. You mention herbivores and omnivores, but what about carnivores? I was in complete horror along with Saloli when Dagasi chopped off the wolves ears for spoons. That is really quite disgusting. I will say I thought Dagasi was really clever by fooling the wolves into trying to drown him. He got an easy escape that way.
I liked your story of the Buzzard as well. Like the man, I definitely thought that the buzzard had ulterior motives to his plan, but I was pleasantly surprised. Your message that we should depend on each other for survival definitely came through, but I think it was great that you had the wolves clarify that at the end of the story.
These last couple weeks, reading the Native American stories have not been my favorite reading assignments this semester. It might have been the stories I chose to read, but they just did not really grab my attention. You had great storytelling techniques and kept my attention the entire time. Using the wolves to tell the stories around the campfire really works for you.
I really enjoyed reading through your storybook. Starting from the home page, I can see you put a lot of thought into the design of your layout. The font you chose for the title fits in perfectly with the theme of your storybook. The curvy handwritten text reminds me of something you would find from a Native American tribe. The collage of pictures was a great choice as well. When thinking of Native American tribes, I definitely think of their strong ties with nature and the ceremonial events around the campfire. The wolves and the blazing fire tie all this together! Many storybooks I have seen have very small pictures on their homepage that can be hard to see. I like that yours takes up most of the page!
"Tricky, Tricky Turtle!" was a great choice for the first entry of your storybook. I thought the title was very clever and fun! Although I thought the mean wolf Wahya probably got what he deserved for stealing from the other animals, it was a little disturbing how Dagasi decided to use his ears after. Maybe his narrow escape from the other wolves will make him think twice about using his fellow animals in such a way!
Your storybook homepage looks very organized, and it has everything that it is supposed to have. I really like the photos that you picked of the fire and wolves. However, the photos and the title definitely set a different tone than your colors and your font. It is like a little girl’s birthday party invitation. I am saying this before having read the introduction or the stories yet.
Again in the intro, your writing and your story are very interesting the photo great, but the font and the colors just really do not fit the theme of a wolf pack in the forest telling old stories of survival.
I really enjoyed your most recent story about the wildcat, the rabbit, and the turkeys. I was glad that the rabbit actually kept his word and did not trick the tiger into a dangerous situation. I have not read the original, but it sounds like it is very similar to your own version, but I am glad that you made your message about working together very clear. Good job on your stories!
Hello Michelle! Great job on your storybook thus far. I must say I am rather impressed, especially with your use of Cherokee throughout each story. I really like your cover page and the images you chose to use for that. I think it is very appropriate and I must say that it intrigued me. As far as the introduction goes, it was very well written, much like the other stories in your book. One thing though, is that it may be nice to hear in your introduction a little about what exactly we will be reading about. I think specifically naming the stories rather than just saying you're going to tell a few stories would be a really great way to introduce what you will be talking about to the reader. The only other comment I really have is concerning the font you chose to use. I think the font is great for titles, however, for the actual story it makes it really hard to read. Especially when you use foreign words, because then I can't read them. I noticed it took me longer to read simply because I was having trouble reading with the font you chose. Other than that I really liked what you have done so far! You can tell that you have put a lot of effort into this and it reflects well on you and your storybook. Great job and keep up the great work!
Hi Michele, I chose you this week for my free choice for the storybook project commenting. I absolutely love your website scheme you chose, it’s very beautiful! Your introduction was definitely attention grabbing with the wolf talking to the reader. After reading your author’s note that explained your goal of revealing the importance of animals in the survival of the Earth. I enjoyed how you incorporated the Cherokee language; I think that makes your storybook project more authentic. In addition, it’s nice to pick up some new Cherokee words with each of your stories. I loved your story; I found it very entertaining to read. In addition, your titles are all so creative and innovative. For your second story “Cohabitation of the Buzzard” I like the changes you made, adding in a lesson to reveal. I actually think I enjoyed reading this story more than the first simply because of the storyline, how a human and animal change places. I have always thought that this would be an interesting experience. After taking a few classes where I was able to learn more about Native American culture, I love how in tune they are with nature and animals. I’m glad I took the opportunity to read your storybook project; I think you have done an excellent job!
Hi Michele!
ReplyDeleteSo. Your Storybook Introduction is awesome. Just thought I'd start with that! It was really cool how you had the wolf pack narrate directly to the reader. I actually imagined myself sitting up warily from the ground to see a camp fire roaring and a pack of wolves all standing around me. I also loved how you had the wolf leader comfort us; you had him know that we would be uncomfortable talking to a wolf. You also explained that the reason they could speak was because the Cherokee spirit flows through them, I loved having the reasoning for why they were capable of talking with me. The wolves are so caring! The main one keeps pushing food and water, knowing that the traveler is exhausted and needs to recuperate, so cool. The hospitality that you have the wolves show makes me wonder if the Cherokee nature is of wonderful generosity and hospitality. Did you learn about that as you were researching and include it in your introduction? If so, you did a wonderful job at incorporating the nature of the Cherokee without blatantly stating it, you worked it into the story from the wolf! I really look forward to reading the stories you have the wolves tell! Keep up the great work!
Hi Michele! First off I love the style of writing you chose for your introduction. Not going to lie reading the first line kind of confused me. I was thinking oh maybe it’s a man? Maybe a spirit? Then I realized oh how fun it’s a talking wolf. The wolf seems very aware that the fact that they can talk could be surprising to someone. I find it humorous that they’re almost treating him as a child. Its endearing how they right off the bat take care of him, giving him a place to rest, food to eat, and pine tea to drink. Not sure what pine tea is but I wouldn’t mind having some while conversing with a talking wolf. I love how you hinted that not only will the wolf be telling tales of the old world but also other creatures too. I’m looking forward to what creatures you’ll use, what they’re going to say, and how the mysterious “ Unega Asgaya” will react to all of this. It’s cool to imagine that this person could be the key to helping form a new better world. Great introduction Michele, I’ll be sure to return and read the remaining story!
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ReplyDeleteSo first this first. I really enjoyed reading your introduction. Like other commenters, I think it is super awesome for the stories to be told from an animal perspective especially a wolf pack! I also really like the idea of the use of "campfire storytelling" method to get your main points across. I really would like to curl up next to a fireplace and read these stories! I also really love that you have given this wolf pack as sense of culture. Culture is one of those things that really excite me and I really appreciate your use of it in these stories! Oh and btw, that picture of the wolf pack... perfection!
Today, I read your first storybook story Tricky, Tricky Turtle. I loved reading this story because it had a good mixture of cute innocents at first and then moral dilemma and a dash of death to counterbalance the cuteness :) . In the beginning of the story I think it was a very nice touch, when you carried over from your introduction to make the read feel comfortable while reading the story! I have to say that overall, the stories moral was pretty clever because I really did not expect the turtle to do what he did to the wolf *non-spoiler*. In your authors note I could really get a sense of the changes you made to the story and I do like them. Also, cute squirrel and turtle picture! I also really like your discussion of the "young weary traveler" I would definitely keep that theme throughout your storybook project!
Hi Michele, I enjoyed the lay out and the cover page of your storybook very much! The purple color and the font is so pretty. The photos on the cover page made me feel like I was about to join the campfire right a long with the travelers in the story. I love Native American stories so I was very drawn to your storybook. Your introduction was very welcoming and made me anxious to read the first story. I think it is important that you not only were making the travelers welcomed to camp but you were also making the reader welcomed to your storybook! That was a unique twist that I have not experienced yet, so nice job. I loved the title of your first story, Tricky Tricky Turtle. I could not wait to see how a turtle was going to play tricks on an animal or person. The story was very clever and the turtle really did trick the wolves! It seems like a reoccurring theme in a lot of the folktales, that the “underdog” in the story always seems to out smart the other person. Great job in telling this story. I also really loved the photo of the squirrel and turtle at the end. How cute!
ReplyDeleteHello Michele! I just wanted to thank you for leaving such awesome feedback on my storybook. Both of you comments were very helpful and made me happy that you enjoyed my story! Thank you once again, I really appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteHey Michele! I know that you have only left a few comments on my blog posts, but the ones that you have left have all been very well written and motivating! Thank you so much for taking the time to actually read and digest my posts! The assignments for this course can be a little repetitive, so getting a little praise every here and there certainly helps! To sum it all up - thank you!
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ReplyDeleteI am here to say thank you for leaving your comment on my post! I found your comment to now only be helpful, but also very sweet. Thank you for your awesome feedback, I really appreciate it!
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Hi Michele! Thank you for your awesome feedback! I was going back through comments that were on my posts and your name came up a couple of times. Each of your comments was detailed and it felt like you had really paid attention while reading my writings. This was very encouraging to me because I feel like I am able to reach the audience when I get feedback like that!
ReplyDeleteHi Michele, I just wanted to say thank you for your feedback on my first Storytelling for this semester. I appreciate that you liked the fact that I added my hometown to my story!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment, Michele! That’s so nice of you to compliment the art! I did happen to draw it, ha ha. Also, I’m really glad you liked the intro! I thought the switch in perspective would ease the reader into the first story and also give insight into Sindbad’s thoughts. As for the first story, that’s great you enjoyed it! I’m glad it made you curious enough to want to know what happens next.
ReplyDeleteMichele, I really just wanted to take some time to say that you for your lovely comment on my Storybook! I'm glad you liked the child perspective of my story and I was glad to hear that my addition of the father in the story had its desired effect. I wanted to create a listener for the story and you absolutely got that. Thank you again, and I hope you have a restful weekend!
ReplyDeleteMichele,
ReplyDeleteYour storybook is wonderful! I really like your cover page, I think the font of the title and the words throughout your stories work wonderfully with the theme! I also like the collage of pictures on the cover page, especially after reading the introduction because all the pictures work perfectly with the storyline.
I absolutely love your introduction! What I found most unique about it was how you defined the characteristics of the reader! For the story to tell me that I'm an exhausted, hungry, lost traveller in the woods clearly sets the stage for some great campfire stories. It's like you gave the reader a reason to stay! I also liked how you set up the personality of the wolf pack too. Overall, I just found your introduction fascinating and enjoyable to read!
Your first story was great! I liked how you carried over the intro into your story, it made for a really smooth transition. The story itself was also a joy to read! I liked how you explained the purpose of the story, and I would have to say that using a squirrel instead of a possum was the perfect choice! The way you write is really wonderful and I look forward to reading more of your storybook!
Hi again, Michele! I've just read your storybook and I have to say how glad I am we were placed in the same commenting group again. Your storybook immediately drew me in with its warm, welcoming introduction. I really like how you've set up the narrative in such a way that I as a reader feel as though I am part of the story - so that I'm not just reading these stories on a computer screen, but sitting there amongst the friendly wolves being treated like a family member. I don't usually say much about author's notes, but I really like how you explained that you are using the animals to mirror human nature. I often have difficulty gleaning that type of information from readings, so I was glad that you explained it as I feel that it helped me to look more deeply into both stories. I also love the central theme of all of us - man and beast - being linked together and able to help one another out, it we would only take the time. Specifically in your second story, I liked how Adahi was inherently perplexed by the sheer altruism of Suli because he is a man. How true it is that we have trouble believing that someone would do something for apparently nothing in return, but Suli proved that true altruism does exist. I love that message. I really enjoyed your storybook, Michele, and look forward to reading more from you in the (very near) future!
ReplyDeleteMichelle, I picked your storybook as my free choice this week because I was interested in how you developed the the Cherokee tales. I loved your introduction and how you have a talking wolf as the voice for the stories. The wolf sets the scene perfectly for the cherokee tales to follow. Wolves are a great represntation of Native American culture and I like how you mention the white man will see how it once was between the wolves and humans. Your sentence "Just as love, understanding, acceptance, and cooperation can ripple their twins across the years, so can hatred, distrust, and anger" is so well written and provides such a great message.
ReplyDeleteThe story of Tricky, Tricky Turtle starts off great with the wolf introducing the story. You keep the storytelling voice of the wolves standard across the stories which helps to connect your storybook. I also like how you introduced the actual story of Dagasi and Saloli with the background of how it was a time when all the animals worked together. The story was kept simple and easy to follow. The ending was perfect too. I loved how you ended the story back with the wolf's voice saying "So you see, young traveler, none of us are faultless." It ties in having the wolf be the voice and also explains the message the wolf wants the traveler to take from the story. Great job in connecting all of your stories seamlessly.
Michele,
ReplyDeleteI really like the picture you have on the welcome page of your storybook. It’s often hard to capture all the elements you would like into one picture on the internet, so it is a smart idea to combine three of them. The image just makes the viewer think that the Cherokee are telling a story about two wolves while sitting around a campfire, which fits perfectly into the theme of your storybook.
As I started reading your introduction, though, I realized that it was the wolves who are telling the story. This was a nice surprise. I only noticed one grammatical mistake in your introduction and that was in the second paragraph. The line reads, “The magic of the Cherokee is flows through our bodies.” The tense of this clause does not make sense, and should be changed to present tense or present perfect, i.e. take out “is” or change “flows” to “flowing.” Also, I am not familiar with the Cherokee language, but will “Unega Asgaya”, which your introduction says means White Man, apply to all readers?
I really enjoyed the story of the Tricky, Tricky Turtle. I thought you tied in the moral very nicely. I was a really entertaining and fascinating story.
Michele,
ReplyDeleteI really like your storybook idea! I haven't read any Cherokee stories so this was very cool. First off, I really like the images you used on your homepage. They tied everything together and really set the mood. It can be difficult to capture the mood with images sometimes so I think using all three elements was a good choice. At first, I thought the Cherokees would be telling the stories but I like that you have the wolves tell the stories. Your introduction was really well written! You used a lot of detail and the tone was great because it was easy to imagine a wolf talking to me at campfire. I definitely wanted to keep reading to find out more. You do a really good job of staying in character and maintaining its tone. I also like the image you used in the introduction. I think it helps set the mood and puts the reader in the mindset that wolves are telling the stories and not the Cherokees.
The "Tricky, Tricky, Turtle!" was told really well! You are really good at writing. I noticed that you changed a few things, but I think they worked well for the story.
Great job!
Hey Michele.
ReplyDeleteYour story caught my attention solely by the title. I have taken many classes on Native American’s and I was curious to see your perspective. Let me just start by saying excellent job! I really feel as though you brought to life the traditional view of Indians, how they are one with nature and kind to others. In your introduction, I love the way you keep away from a dialogue so that you can just jump right into the stories. Your introduction actually makes me think of those old black and white movies where someone speaks to the camera, which is something I really enjoyed about your story. It was actually somewhat of a comfort that the narrator was concerned about me as the reader and wanted me to be at ease. The clarification of what each story was going to be about before you even started the story was definitely something I particularly liked. You get to know just a little bit about it, but it leaves you wanting more. I really like how you continue the theme of hospitality throughout each story. The storyteller always makes sure that the travelers needs come first and that he understands each story. Each time this occurs, you can hear how excited the narrator is to have a companion. Great Job. Keep up the good work!
Michele,
ReplyDeleteI love your picture collage. Most people I have seen have only used one picture so this is refreshing and sets the tone for your storybook quite nicely. Also, I love the font and color scheme you have chosen. Comparing it to your blog, I am gonna take a wild guess and say that purple is your favorite color.
I really like how you are having the wolves tell the stories. What made you decide on the wolves? Your introduction is great. It really makes me want to relax by the fire and hear what these wolves have to say.
I like your title "Tricky Tricky Turtle." I love the idea of all the animals helping each other out. You mention herbivores and omnivores, but what about carnivores? I was in complete horror along with Saloli when Dagasi chopped off the wolves ears for spoons. That is really quite disgusting. I will say I thought Dagasi was really clever by fooling the wolves into trying to drown him. He got an easy escape that way.
I liked your story of the Buzzard as well. Like the man, I definitely thought that the buzzard had ulterior motives to his plan, but I was pleasantly surprised. Your message that we should depend on each other for survival definitely came through, but I think it was great that you had the wolves clarify that at the end of the story.
These last couple weeks, reading the Native American stories have not been my favorite reading assignments this semester. It might have been the stories I chose to read, but they just did not really grab my attention. You had great storytelling techniques and kept my attention the entire time. Using the wolves to tell the stories around the campfire really works for you.
Hey Michelle!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading through your storybook. Starting from the home page, I can see you put a lot of thought into the design of your layout. The font you chose for the title fits in perfectly with the theme of your storybook. The curvy handwritten text reminds me of something you would find from a Native American tribe. The collage of pictures was a great choice as well. When thinking of Native American tribes, I definitely think of their strong ties with nature and the ceremonial events around the campfire. The wolves and the blazing fire tie all this together! Many storybooks I have seen have very small pictures on their homepage that can be hard to see. I like that yours takes up most of the page!
"Tricky, Tricky Turtle!" was a great choice for the first entry of your storybook. I thought the title was very clever and fun! Although I thought the mean wolf Wahya probably got what he deserved for stealing from the other animals, it was a little disturbing how Dagasi decided to use his ears after. Maybe his narrow escape from the other wolves will make him think twice about using his fellow animals in such a way!
Your storybook homepage looks very organized, and it has everything that it is supposed to have. I really like the photos that you picked of the fire and wolves. However, the photos and the title definitely set a different tone than your colors and your font. It is like a little girl’s birthday party invitation. I am saying this before having read the introduction or the stories yet.
ReplyDeleteAgain in the intro, your writing and your story are very interesting the photo great, but the font and the colors just really do not fit the theme of a wolf pack in the forest telling old stories of survival.
I really enjoyed your most recent story about the wildcat, the rabbit, and the turkeys. I was glad that the rabbit actually kept his word and did not trick the tiger into a dangerous situation. I have not read the original, but it sounds like it is very similar to your own version, but I am glad that you made your message about working together very clear. Good job on your stories!
Hello Michelle! Great job on your storybook thus far. I must say I am rather impressed, especially with your use of Cherokee throughout each story. I really like your cover page and the images you chose to use for that. I think it is very appropriate and I must say that it intrigued me. As far as the introduction goes, it was very well written, much like the other stories in your book. One thing though, is that it may be nice to hear in your introduction a little about what exactly we will be reading about. I think specifically naming the stories rather than just saying you're going to tell a few stories would be a really great way to introduce what you will be talking about to the reader.
ReplyDeleteThe only other comment I really have is concerning the font you chose to use. I think the font is great for titles, however, for the actual story it makes it really hard to read. Especially when you use foreign words, because then I can't read them. I noticed it took me longer to read simply because I was having trouble reading with the font you chose.
Other than that I really liked what you have done so far! You can tell that you have put a lot of effort into this and it reflects well on you and your storybook. Great job and keep up the great work!
Hi Michele,
ReplyDeleteI chose you this week for my free choice for the storybook project commenting. I absolutely love your website scheme you chose, it’s very beautiful! Your introduction was definitely attention grabbing with the wolf talking to the reader. After reading your author’s note that explained your goal of revealing the importance of animals in the survival of the Earth. I enjoyed how you incorporated the Cherokee language; I think that makes your storybook project more authentic. In addition, it’s nice to pick up some new Cherokee words with each of your stories. I loved your story; I found it very entertaining to read. In addition, your titles are all so creative and innovative.
For your second story “Cohabitation of the Buzzard” I like the changes you made, adding in a lesson to reveal. I actually think I enjoyed reading this story more than the first simply because of the storyline, how a human and animal change places. I have always thought that this would be an interesting experience. After taking a few classes where I was able to learn more about Native American culture, I love how in tune they are with nature and animals. I’m glad I took the opportunity to read your storybook project; I think you have done an excellent job!